The First Time I Saw…. Trifextra Challenge

A Love Poem to My Husband
A Love Poem to My Husband

The First Time I Saw…

Tilt of your smile,

Black of your hair,

Lilt of your walk,

Depth of your stare–

Heat filled me up

All else a blur

But this I knew:

You are him. I’m her.

 

A response to:

This week’s Trifextra challenge.  This week we are asking you to count syllables.  And words.  It’s a lot of math for those of us who might be more accustomed to dealing with words, but we’re confident you can pull it off.
We are asking for a 33-word response to the following snippet:

The first time I saw. . .

Here’s the catch: all of your 33 words must be one syllable each.  We’re going low-brow on your this week.  Or not.  Can you class it up under these restrictions?  Give us your best.

To clarify, we are giving you 5 words.  We want another 33 from you, for a grand total of 38. – See more at: http://www.trifectawritingchallenge.com/#sthash.MiIYUtYF.dpuf

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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26 thoughts on “The First Time I Saw…. Trifextra Challenge

  1. I’ve never done one of these challenges before. You say you weren’t used to doing this but you made it look effortless!

  2. The rhyming structure adds to the cadence of the poem but, more than that, the message it conveys is powerfully life-affirming and beautiful. Well done and, congratulations on finding Love. 🙂

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